Little Girls and Toys : 55-Fiction

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This post is a part of Write Over the Weekend, an initiative for Indian Bloggers by BlogAdda.


Write Over the Weekend theme for this Mar 1, 2013:
Use these three words in your post ‘Little Girl, Toy, Scared’


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Broken

The little girl cowered in a corner with her toy, scared and shaking.
Before her, Daddy was beating Mommy senseless with his belt.
“Daddy, please. Stop hitting her”
“Shut up bitch, before I knock your teeth out”
She picked up the gun on the table and shot him thrice. Then sat playing with her doll.

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Lost

Mia watched the little girl through the door, playing in the garden. Her hair shone like gold in the sunshine.
Mia walked to her and held out a toy. “Come here, baby, don’t be scared”.  
Mia knelt and hugged her close.
Jack saw his wife embracing thin air. Their daughter’s death was driving her insane.

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Possessed

“Who’s your best friend?”
“Chuck”, said the little girl shyly.
“But Chuck is just a toy”
“No he’s not. He plays with me, and talks to me, and we sing songs together.”
“Children and their imagination”, said Daddy, tucking her in.
He switched off the light.
“Don’t be scared, and don’t believe them”, whispered Chuck.

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Unwanted

They saw the grimy, malnourished little girl twirling an attractive toy - a brightly coloured, sparkling top.
“Thief”, they accused.
 “I found it”, she said, scared. “We’re both unwanted”.
When they were done punishing her for a crime not committed, she lay lifeless and broken.
Try as they did, the top never spun again.

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Damaged

The little girl picked up the toy. A GI Joe with a broken arm.
She cleaned him, taped him up, cared for him.
One night her uncle attacked her.
He was found dead the next day.
Post-mortem revealed a mysterious object that had pierced his heart from within.
It looked like a tiny arm.

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26 comments:

  1. Oh Boy! I'd hv been proud to have thought up even one of these, Mixi! Amazing how you can not only create these gems but also convey strong emotions in so few words.

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    1. Thank you so much Sir. I'm sure if you tried your hand at this genre, you'll be a veritable master at it, given your gift of wit (since wit and brevity go hand in hand!)

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  2. 'LOST' is touching!! you are very good in 55! :)

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  3. Lovely... 'Unwanted' i reckon was the best, though it's hard to choose between them....each has its own merit. Take a pat on the back...Oh, my hand just ran through your back and came out of the front :O

    Which one is the ghost

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    1. Ritesh, you almost discovered my true existence and I cannot let that happen.... Watch your back... :S

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  4. Mixi You are just amazing. Your thinking starts at the point beyond the huge a distance after I end. Emotions we feel after reading your write are unimaginable .

    Thanks for sharing ....

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    1. Thank you so much Vishal! Your words give me great encouragement :)

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  5. This one is YOUR medium Meenakshi, you convey so much succinctly. Third one is too good.

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    1. Thank you so much Meenakshi :)

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  6. A touch of macabre here but as always an extremely enjoyable read.

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  7. amazing ! I can't single out one 55er and say thats the best ...each one is lovely and together they make a masterpiece !!

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  8. These are something...really each and every one was a thought provoking...not just to senses but to a soul...great work done...!!!

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    1. Thank you so much Anjan!

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  9. nicely done Mixi! you are really good at it! even though i am not comfortable reading such stories but found them quite engrossing.

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    1. Thanks for reading them anyway, DJ :)

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  10. Well written but so morbid. I liked the way you bring out emotions but I didn't feel good reading them.

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    1. Agreed bellybytes. The challenge with 55-fiction is to tell a compelling story in very limited words. So the most evocative emotions that lend themselves easily to create a punchy story are the ones with horror, fear or sorrow. However, I have written a few 55-ers that are not so morbid :D Try reading them and let me know (they're under the Flash fiction tab on top of this page)

      Thanks for sharing your feedback, belly bytes! :)

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  11. Each one was better than the other! Loved all the stories! So sensitive yet so strong! You're a master of 55 Fictions! I haven't tried one in a long time and I got some inspiration from you to write one soon. :) Truly, a WOW post!

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    1. Thanks Akanksha! Looking forward to reading your 55ers :)

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  12. wonderful.. you are so good at 55.. very emotive with just few words.. kudos..

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    1. Thank you so much Meera :)

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